So I had an idea for a story/book that I wanted to write, a sort of erotic thriller, but as I have never written anything like this before I wanted to share an excerpt with you to see if you think it is worth pursuing or not.
To put the below into context, here is a brief summary of what has happened so far..Tommy is a 28 year old construction worker from Oregon, who works at his Father-in-laws business. He is supervising over construction to a billionaire business tycoon and his ex-supermodel wife- Chelsea May's house in Topanga. By co-incidence, Chelsea used to be Tommys babysitter when he was 12 and she was 19, and he was infatuated with her (that they both knew). When Chelsea recognises Tommy (or little Tom Tom as she used to call him) she invites him over to dinner with her whilst her husband is away on business. After a lot of awkward sexual tension at dinner their lust gets the better of them...
...his hand caressed her thigh, gently stroking with fingers spread wide. As he went further up he sensed her body quiver. His hand skimmed over her vagina, and he sensed her lips yearn out to his fingers- like a magnet- and he was surprised at how wet she was already. In that moment something within him changed, if the dragon had been slowly awakening earlier, it was now fully risen and had not only taken over his solid member, but also his mind and body. His whole body lurched forwards with a confidence and as-surety that took Chelsea by surprise. His strong and muscular torso pressed against her, squishing her ample bosom against his chest, and she could suddenly sense how erect her nipples had become. She moved her hands to his taught behind and slowly moved them up to start removing his t-shirt. Before she got too far, Tommy leaned back and lifted his white t-shirt over his head, stretching out and exposing his muscular body that made Chelsea gasp. In that moment she knew the momentum had shifted, she was suddenly transformed into the giggling teenager whilst he had become, well something she had not experienced before. As his t-shirt dropped to the ground Tommy was suddenly back pressed against her kissing her passionately on the mouth before moving to her neck, all the while caressing her hair with one hand, whilst the other tightly grasped her inner-thigh. Suddenly, it was though the dragon in Tommy took over again he pulled his body back and brought both hands to the shoulders of Chelseas dress, pulling at the straps firmly. In that moment neither of them cared how expensive and exclusive that designer dress was, it was just a piece of cloth that was getting in the way of their ecstasy.
Tommy suddenly paused as he saw Chelseas exposed body for the first time since he was 12 years old, however this moment of a adoration was fleeting as Chelsea rose and kissed his chest and then with no warning but at his nipple with passion. Again the dragon awoke within Tommy pushed her shoulders down and started to unbuckle his belt. Chelsea could sense convulsions in her nether regions even before his pants had hit the floor, with one hand retracting to her wet vagina with pure instinct. As Tommy pulled his tight trunks down, his hard penis sprung out like a jack-in-the-box. Chelsea unconsciously licked her lips at the sight, he sure was the full package she thought as her hand moved from her slit to his length. His head glistened and invited her moist glossy red lips to devour him. He let out a strong murmur as she took him in her mouth. This was what 12 year old Tommy would repeatedly dream about as he furiously masturbated, but in this moment adult Tommy didn't give it a second thought, he was in the moment, caught up in the pure passion of the situation. Her mouth was like silk, sliding up and down his shaft. Her hands gripped his hips tightly, and although he could have stayed in this feeling of pleasure forever Tommy had the sudden urge to taste Chelsea. He pulled out, and looked down, her eyes were fixated on his and it felt like there souls had interconnected. She stood up next to him, front to front, and it was only then Chelsea noticed how much Tommy had grown, he towered above her, his rock hard dick pressing at her stomach. He leant down as he kissed her mouth, raising her chin with his hand as he did. She had not felt like this in a long time, pure love and ecstasy, and then all of a sudden her body was spun round and pressed towards the couch. She arched her behind as she felt Tommy's hands stroke down the sides of her body. She gave a sudden gasp as she felt the thrust of his wet tongue between her lower-lips. My god, she didn't even know where she was as he probed and licked her slit up and down, nibbling and sucking on her clit. Her eyes were clamped shut, and as she tried to open them everything was a blur, just colours and shapes intertwining like some sort of cosmic dream. Her heartbeat was racing and she thought she was going to explode through her chest, when all of a sudden she felt the the force of thick wet finger being inserted into her, and let out a shrill yelp of pure delight.
At this moment Tommy didn't exist, his movements being guided by instinct not thought, as he curved and squeezed his fingers inside Chelseas tight, wet, pussy. His tongue moved up from her slit to her behind as he gave her cheeks a playful bite and then nuzzled into her arsehole. He had never done anything like this with his wife, he had never done anything like this with anyone. She pressed herself back against his face and he could tell from her stammering and yelping that she was enjoying this as much as he was.
Chelsea was in rapture, and she reached her arms around her back to grip at Tommys short hair, wanting to push his face and tongue further into her. She never wanted this feeling to stop, and her body suddenly convulsed in orgasmic pleasure like she had never felt before. It seemed to last forever, but as soon as the feeling subsided, she wanted more and she wanted him inside of her, and with a low, exhausted, panting voice, she turned her head and whispered 'Fuck Me'...
...would love to hear anyones thoughts on this and whether it is something I should pursue, or if I am just wasting my time with terrible writing š PLEASE BE HONEST! If you want to hear more of the overall story please let me know too!
