I registered with InkTip.com, a service which posts screenwriters' log lines ( TV Guide description) in the hope of attracting producers who use the site to find scripts. I'm trying to figure out which is a better log line for my screenplay "Bordertown":
1. A private eye operating out of a U.S.-Mexico border hamlet investigates a Mexican version of the JFK assassination, complete with multiple gunmen, a fall guy, the death of witnesses, and a far-flung conspiracy reaching to the highest levels of government, or
2. A professional wrestler turned private eye investigates a Mexican politician's murder.
I currently have the first one posted on the site and, though some producers have looked at my log line, no one has looked at my treatment, synopsis or script. The site logs all that information.
Anyway, I'd appreciate any feedback you can give me.
1. A private eye operating out of a U.S.-Mexico border hamlet investigates a Mexican version of the JFK assassination, complete with multiple gunmen, a fall guy, the death of witnesses, and a far-flung conspiracy reaching to the highest levels of government, or
2. A professional wrestler turned private eye investigates a Mexican politician's murder.
I currently have the first one posted on the site and, though some producers have looked at my log line, no one has looked at my treatment, synopsis or script. The site logs all that information.
Anyway, I'd appreciate any feedback you can give me.
tunnel_vision:
I think #1 is best ... unless they are looking for something different.
tunnel_vision:
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