hey people any chance on getting some feedback on this piece quickly? it is tentatively titled "father knows best?"
basically i need to work out whether it is good enough to submit for my written assignment, ow wehter i should submit that"mary" peice which i would really prefer to keep for use as an oral, but will use for this assessment if i must.
oh...
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basically i need to work out whether it is good enough to submit for my written assignment, ow wehter i should submit that"mary" peice which i would really prefer to keep for use as an oral, but will use for this assessment if i must.
oh...
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so there is this girl. ...
this girl came totally out of nowhere.
anyhow this girl and i seem to be getting on really well.
but the girl and i had no idea that either of us would be coming along.
therefore everything is sort of crazy because we are trying to work out how to spend as much time together and not pressure the...
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this girl came totally out of nowhere.
anyhow this girl and i seem to be getting on really well.
but the girl and i had no idea that either of us would be coming along.
therefore everything is sort of crazy because we are trying to work out how to spend as much time together and not pressure the...
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suicide_reese:
hahaha i think about them more than one day in advance whether i actually do it is another thing!
well it looks like i have a double positive for you guys today. firstly it seems as though i have recovered from my flu. secondly, if you remember i posted a really rough version of a story that i was working on, a week or two ago, i have now finished this story, i think. and yes i am going to post it in the...
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steven:
Dude, I'm envious: sick our not, you're the one who's got a girl. Nuff said.
That's reading better
That's reading better
marni:
hello you! i agree with Steven, it is reading better. it is a tidy character profile but i would not mind knowing a little bit more about her, like how she got to be this way or what makes her hopeful. and i personally liked the last line from your other draft better because it demonstrates her independant spirit and it is succinct.
so. there is my two cents
so. there is my two cents
bleh ... feeling sick.
damn woman, giving me the flu.
damn woman, giving me the flu.
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cottongloves:
i've had the flu for the past month it stinks ... keep getting a little better and then it comes again.. stupid flu.. hope you get better soon
natatree:
*sends you get better vibes*
oh my oh my oh my.
guess what?
it snowed here today. it snowed! i have never seen snow before. it was beautiful, it was magical, it was the most amazing brief re-acquaintance with my childhold self.
guess what?
it snowed here today. it snowed! i have never seen snow before. it was beautiful, it was magical, it was the most amazing brief re-acquaintance with my childhold self.
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natatree:
yeah, make me 
i'm trying.
i'm trying.
natatree:
ahahah wow, that would have been amusing! Probably not for you though!
So how have you been otherwise?
So how have you been otherwise?
ok, I know that i promised you guys a story a few days ago. but the thing is that it is still sort of taking shape. so I thought i would keep you all interested by just posting what i have so far.
so here is the work in progress of a peice i have titled Mary.
She wakes up. Her bed clothes are roughly...
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so here is the work in progress of a peice i have titled Mary.
She wakes up. Her bed clothes are roughly...
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keep posted people because i think i have an idea for a story; and if it all comes together i might just post it here for some feedback.
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marni:
if you photographed your unmade bed with a polaroid camera, i am sure it would artistic too. you are just not trying hard enough!
poor bed.
poor bed.
natatree:
Penrith Panthers hey?
I sometime sleep in nothing but a bulldogs jersey if its cold.
I sometime sleep in nothing but a bulldogs jersey if its cold.
will you hate me?
will you hate me enough to think about me everyday?
will you hate me enough to take note of my every success and failure?
will you hate me with a fervour which consumes, and boils, and grows?
will you hate me; for i have given up on being loved. will you hate me for the selfish ego trip it will provide?...
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will you hate me enough to think about me everyday?
will you hate me enough to take note of my every success and failure?
will you hate me with a fervour which consumes, and boils, and grows?
will you hate me; for i have given up on being loved. will you hate me for the selfish ego trip it will provide?...
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steven:
Nah, couldn't be arsed. 
marni:
if i am near a supermarket today, i am so going to look for that super-shake crunchy thing! it sounds so yummy [and cheap]!
i just watched the exorcist. really good movie, 'twas. sadly the people that i was watching it with did not have the patience or attention span to enjoy it. oh well thats what happens when all your friends are children. its really satisfying though when you watch a movie that is surrounded with a lot of hype for the first time and it actually somewhat...
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natatree:
I really want to see the exorcist, but I don't want to sit and watch it by myself and I don't have any friends willing too.
I wsih I coudl fight back, but i dunno if I can be strong enough.
I wsih I coudl fight back, but i dunno if I can be strong enough.
natatree:
It feel sliek i need super human strangth, getting up is hard, I hate waking up and still feeling the same.
i wrote this in my creative writing workshop today and i liked it and have decided to share ...
all the poisonous thoughts from my tired mind provide me with a venomous fuel as i push through the crowd of dawdlers and cars. leading hand on my left knee, right leg pushing furiously, i fly past all and sundry, knowing that at any moment it...
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all the poisonous thoughts from my tired mind provide me with a venomous fuel as i push through the crowd of dawdlers and cars. leading hand on my left knee, right leg pushing furiously, i fly past all and sundry, knowing that at any moment it...
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natatree:
No calls. I've explained that all to you.
natatree:
okay?
If your delivery is confident, this piece will be better for an oral than Mary. But don't quote me on that.